Response to "Evening Parties" by Rose Macaulay
Human beings are strangers, no-one can understand them in society but only themselves. They give us fake pleasure than the physical one. Actors in a play,for pretending;or dressing like a bride and groom, for showing off; or even starving for food,like dogs. Sally forth at someone’s else expenses nor because they really feel that they want to be there. I see them conventionalism others and trying to do the same things. Hostess or host are not there for them , she/he disappears from the time that all that come up. They don’t celebrate hostess birthday or the event that are invited to, but these that they think is better for them; wathcing football match; or even playing tampoo.to spend their time.
When the appointed date arrives, we bieleve to be suitable and perfect enough for the party and we dress up depence on the other quests. We running to buy clothes to be vantage of the night even you don’t have money to eat the next day;or you borrow clothes from your neighboors. Therefore we clothe ourselves to pleasure ‘’the others’’ not to be comfortable and feel yourself in a way. According to Macaulay’s essay “ if it gives you no pleasure , and if, further, you derive none from listening to the remarks of others, there is no need to converse’’. I tottaly agree with her, we should do whatever make us feel happy and not pretending, just to be there like a chair, an object with no soul. Wear anything you like, a jean with a white t-shirt; or even wear a dress that costs fifteen euro because you like it but not something expensive that makes you look frick and doesn’t match you. Be yourself anywhere you go.
Evening parties are prepared to give pleasure to quests and have fun. Hostess preparation for a party is too difficult and expensive indeed. I am convinced that the majority of human beings do not go to the party because he/she respects the hostess but to have a nice diner, or spent his/her time; or even showing off themselves to find a lover. It’s not that the point. We should go to parties, I agree you can meet other people and have a brief discussion with them but not to get a room after that. Oh, my goodness! Realation-ships are not like that. Good realation-ships it depends on you from the first time you gonna start to create it., if something goes wrong you lost the game.
This is, when you get your posteboard card inscribed with the details of the party, make questions to your self, “Shall I have fun to this?’’ “ I will dance and feel the music?” “It’s better if I stay at home and cook pasta?”. Seat down to your relaxing chair and think if you prefare to spend your money to go somewhere that you may feel unuseless or organize to go out with your friends at a club with a music of your choice. On the other hand go to the party that you are invited to, and if you realize that you feel like been in a theatre with actors to pretend, attiring rediculous dressers and costums and that you want to shrick, find the exit door and run away.
Dear my classmate Froso...
ReplyDeleteI would like to tell you that your responce essay was clearly enough to understand that the topic was "Evening parties".
Firstly, your essay has a good organisation but I think you comment on it in many details and in more general responce. You improved your ideas and thoughts, but I don't thing that there is someone who really get to questioning itself like "I will dance and feel the music"? I mean even you I dont thing to wonder this before to go to a party.
Secondly, your phrases was interested to be read but there are some vocabulary mistakes like "realation-ships". The correct word is "relationships" and the word "prefare" is "prefer". Also, there are some mistakes on syntax like "I see them conventionalism others and trying to do the same thing". What do you mean by that?
Thirdly, I liked most the phrase when you said "Actors in a play for pretending;or dressing like a bride and groom, for showing off;or even starving for food,like dogs". It is a really powerful line. Therefore, your structure is improved and you had a good knowledge of the subject.
Finally your responce essay was good enough because your thoughts said it so. But, I would like to suggest you to have a better vocabulary which means to avoid some mistakes which you could not have. Although to have a better syntax. Your responce essay was improved but I am sure that you can be more improvng. Thanks.
Froso's response essay was quite interesting. She seems to be aware of what she is commenting on, but there are a lot of grammar and syntax mistakes. Correct me if I am mistaken, but the word "gonna" can not be used in written academic texts. I agree with xenia about the sentence " I see them conventionalism others and trying do the same thing" - you lost me there.
ReplyDeleteThe essay had a good structure though and it was organized very well.Unfortunately,when we do grammar and syntax mistakes we tend to loose our readers.This is why revising what we have written again and again before we submit it, considers to be crucial.
The element that I liked more about Froso's response essay, is that she new exactly which issues to emphasize more, in her writings and she successfully manage to achieve that.
Froso, the essay that you have written has a nice structure. It consists of an introduction, a number of paragraphs in the main body, and a conclusion. My favorite part of your essay is in the introduction where you say that people when going to parties, are “actors in a play”. You state from the beginning that you don’t like the pretentious behavior of people when going to parties.
ReplyDeleteThere are several mistakes in your essay regarding vocabulary and grammar. I was a little confused with your sentence “I see them conventionalism others and trying to do the same things.” I think that you intended to say: I see them being conventional with others by trying to do the same things. Regarding your last paragraph, I think it would be better if you had written different questions that comes someone’s mind when getting his/her invitation card.
I like the parts in your essay where you describe the anxiety of the person that gets invited to the party regarding what he/she will wear, or the way that he/she should behave. I agree with you that we “should do whatever makes us happy”. After all, what’s the reason for someone to go to a party if he/she feels uncomfortable being there?
Froso, I like the way you express your thoughts and the way of organizing your essay. It is clear that your opinion about ‘’evening parties’’ is to attend a party when we are really want to, but if a party is being like a theatre with pretending actors is better to run way. The phrase that I liked most is ‘’ we running to buy clothes to be vantage of the night even you don’t have money to eat the next day’’. I choose it as my favorite because is the reality of today’s. Moreover, I also like the last paragraph and your way you use questions. This makes us to think and to understand the reason of why we don’t want to go to a party and why we want to go to a party.
ReplyDeleteHowever, while I was reading your essay I found some spelling mistakes which most of us confused. I believe that by correcting these mistakes your essay would be much better. Also be careful with your spacing, when you are writing two words with commas it has to be a space among the words and the comma. That is all from me!
Froso your responding essay was enough interesting and you are aware what you wrote. I like the phrase “ Actors in a play for pretending; or dressing like a bride and groom, for showing off; or even starving for food, like dogs” that was very strong phrase. It was organized and you separate your paragraphs in introduction, main body and conclusion. You mentioned something that it very correct that it is until today that people go to parties by showing there self and I agree with that and also that evening parties are to give to guest pleasure and have fun and that the preparation for a party is very difficult and a little bit expensive. But there were some mistakes like your syntax when you said “I see them conventionalism others and trying to do the same thing” me too I didn’t understand what you mean by that. Also there are some vocabulary mistakes that if you look again can be correct and be better.
ReplyDeleteThanks you all guys, I know that i have grammar mistakes and syntax.I will improve that if i start revising the text because until now i never do that. Elena i will look again and i am sure that can be better but no perfect! Nobody is perfect and we support that to our first essay 'statement of goals'. I will do my best I promise.
ReplyDeleteThanks all of you!!!
I think that Froso did a good job in making her point that people have superficial reasons for going to parties (i.e. merely to show off). Froso also gave lots of examples of how inappropriately people tend to behave when at a party. On the one hand the guests who take advantage of the free food, wear an expensive dress that makes them look 'freakish' or are too self-involved to pay any attention to the hostess who had invited ; and on the other the hostess herself who doesn't even appear on the party scene, and even if she does, it's after spending hours of slaving away in the kitchen(or the rest of the household). I credit Froso for going deep into the issue of evening parties, since she makes the metaphorical comparison of party goers being like a chair, an object with no soul ; and that in fact sets the climate for her essay as a whole. It easy for us to imagine that most people having been influenced by 'conventional' values that promote the importance of mingling with people you might not have anything in common with, simply due to the fact that it's considered socially acceptable behaviour or because you could meet someone whose well-connected.
ReplyDeleteIn retrospect, Froso's essay followed a logical sequence. Both the introduction and the main body included her analytical interpretations (of Macaulay's sardonic essay), which I personally found to be rather useful to the reader. Admittedly, the conclusion seemed to me a little bit too colloquial in style (i.e. its use of parenthetical phrases), but I liked the last line, since I found it to be quite philosophical and it simultaneously send out a strong / humorous message. In some cases the flow of the essay was at times confusing, since some of her sentences made me feel that I was reading a list and not a literary essay. Maybe Froso should practise her syntax construction, so that the meaning linking the various paragraph sentences will be better harmonised. Overall I thought that Froso used either too few or too many commas in her sentences, and this in turn made it hard for the reader to keep up with her ideas. Furthermore, it seemed as though Froso didn't focus enough on basic spelling of English words (e.g. 'quests/ bieleve/ depence/ neighboors/ relation-ships/ wachting').
In the final analysis however, I feel that Froso provided sufficient insight as to her opinions regarding those who 'pretend' (with an emphasis on the concept of being 'actors') to yield pleasure by going to parties and dress up in an attempt to 'please' or impress ’the others’ present at this social event. Froso argues that people act irrationally when invited to a party, since even their dress sense relies to great extent on what their peers are going to wear ; and to make things worse most of us will waste extravant sums of money buying a fancy dress, when in fact we don't even have enough money for a decent meal. Froso makes it clear, that each of us is free to decide whether it is really worth our while make a special effort to attend a certain party or whether we could derive more enjoyment from the simple, funloving activities and truly social events that characterise Western people's lives. Froso informs us that relationships ought to be valued, and it would be sheer selfishness to sacrifice them for a mindless party.