Throughout history, women are struggling to earn equal rights with men. Societies themselves are build up in an unfair way towards women, something that makes the situation for them even difficult to change. The general mentality of men, is that women should not have the same privileges as them, and even some women of older generations seem to have the same belief. This is probably due to the fact that from the moment these women were born, they were taught to be subordinate to men, so that notion seems to be correct for them, and they consider it unacceptable to think otherwise. Nowadays, women in most societies are considered by law to be equal to men. But that’s not the case. Unequal treatment of women in
According to statistics that had been published in newspapers, there are less women employed in either public or private positions than men. The same statistics show that women are underpaid in relation with their male coworkers. Even in executive positions where women have the same qualifications and efficiency at work with their male coworkers, they are still underpaid. This difference in the salaries can’t be attributed to anything else than the gender of the employees.
Regarding politics, there are less female than male politicians. When governments are formed after elections and each president is about to assign ministers to each ministry, there are more male than female politicians being assigned as ministers. Even in the parliament women are underrepresented. How are women expected to get the majority of votes in the parliament regarding the formation of a new drastic law that favours them, if they are outnumbered?
Women that decide to stay at home and raise their children should be supported much more financially by the governments. Raising children is a difficult and time consuming thing to do. Each of these women has the role of the mother twenty four hours a day, and things are more difficult for working, single mothers. Governments should increase the financial support to these women in order to help them, but also as a way to praise them for their contribution to the society.
I believe that the
The image that society created for women is the one of a kind, delicate, weak person who needs to be protected by someone. Society’s notion is that at first, women are protected by their family, but after that they must get married so that they have a husband to look after them. In the past, when women were mistreated by their husbands or were unhappy, they didn’t ask for divorce because they were afraid of what other people would think about them, what would happen to the children, and of what would happen to them regarding financial issues. Nowadays, mistreated and unhappy wives tend to ask for divorce more easily than they did in the past, but still some of them choose to stay married. That change of tendency of women towards divorce happens because of some amendments in law. These amendments happened because of women’s attempts to earn them. They happened not a long time ago, and arrange various issues like the custody of the children, and the right of women to claim for property in divorce. The change of society’s and even the Church’s attitude towards divorce also functions positively to the decision of these women to ask for divorce.
Women should be treated more fairly, and additional measures should be taken in their advantage regarding all aspects of their lives. Women are dynamic because they earned most, if not all of their rights with struggles. Life was harsher for women in the past but they did not abash. They found the strength to oppose to the existing situations, and they still do. So, who should be considered as the “Sterner sex”? Men that had all the privileges in their possession from the beginning, or women who fought to earn every single one of them?
Nico,
ReplyDeleteYour essay was very interesting. At first of all I liked your introductory paragraph which it shows us what you are going to talk about in your main body. Your theme, based on women in our society nowadays is structured in a very detailed ways which helps us interested and follows your writing and not feels bored. I liked the way you write your main body when you had used one paragraph for each point. Also, it was nice that you have used examples and questions to specify your points such as in your 3rd paragraph when you have said ‘How are women expected to get the majority of votes in the parliament regarding the formation of a new drastic law that favours them, if they are outnumbered?’. All the points that you have used in your essay were all important and most of all is the reality that happens around us but no one seems to care about it and change it. Furthermore, I liked the contrast that you have used in your 6th paragr. Between women in nowadays with women in the past.
However in my opinion your essay would be more interesting if you had used some linking words when you start a sentence. Moreover, I think it was unnecessary to use the phrase ‘in my opinion’ (5th parag.) in your essay as you could continue with the way you had started. Another point I wanted to add is to be more careful in your way of writing by putting a comma where it has to be to split the sentence As for your conclusion you actually make us and succeed your goal, be interested with your essay, and your questions you have used make a motion in your way of writing.
Niko,
ReplyDeleteyour essay was interesting as you approved your goal, you give us to understand that you are not of those men that don't accept from a woman to have the upper hand. You describe women from their origin until their destination (nowadays). You wrote about marriage that's impress me because men nowadays don't think about marriage at all, it's a word that scares them. Why it happens that? If a woman starts talking to a man about marriage she feels the creeps. Though are other men that are more conventional with the issue of marriage and the issue of female politicians. I believe that male and female must to have the same rights because otherwise we will not survive.
However in my opinion your essay has good stucture and you split paragraphs very well.
As elena noted above and I agree with her is about your commas, check it and it will be better. Closing with a question it’s interesting because then the readers will think about it and they will be in able to respect your essay more. Well done Niko!
Nico, in your respond essay is very clear that you bring the issue of sterner sex regarding women. It is very pleased seeing a man considering all this issues that makes the woman lower and weaker than men. This shows that you are recognizing this unfair between the two sexes. I like when you said that ‘’each of these women has the role of the mother twenty four hours a day’’, because by saying this you underline the importance of a woman that has strength and not weakness. I also like the fact that you discuss about the position of a woman that had in the past and the position that a woman has today.
ReplyDeleteHowever, I think that your essay it would be more interested if you have added some oppositions regarding to the title ‘’ sterner sex’’, for example what women did through the history such as the first women that went to the moon. Also there is a part in your essay that I don't agree with you; church is not unfair to woman. A woman cannot be a priest or archbishop for many reasons one of which is because women are made for giving birth. Considering this, women are very lucky for having at least the opportunity to become nuns.
Nico,
ReplyDeleteI liked your essay very much. To be more specific I liked the way you have structured the essay. You wrote a very nice introduction that explained to us what was the essay about clearly. I also liked the fact that you wrote some historical informations as well, for example “ this is probably due to the fact that from the moment these women (the women of older generations) were born,they were taught to be subordinate to men” . Furthermore as Elena said on her comment you wrote one paragraph for each point and this made your essay more clear and understandable and also it showed us that you write in cohesion. The only thing that I would suggest you in order to improve your essay is that you could write about men's opinion, in particular, not just what the whole society believes about women. Do men as a group believe, recognize, this unfair way of treatment from society towards the female gender? To end up I would like to say that your conclusion was great, you managed to defend women's right with strong arguments such as “women are dynamic because they earned most, if not all of their rights with struggles” and “so, who should be considered as the “sterner sex? Men that had all the privileges in their possession from the beginning or women who fought to earn every single one of them?” . You wrote a very good essay!
Nico,
ReplyDeleteI liked your essay very much and the thing that I liked most of all is the fact that you took womens side all throughout your essay and defended us and not males.
I liked very much the way that you ended your essay with this question:" Men that had all the privileges in their possession from the beginning, or women who fought to earn every single one of them? " which clearly shows that women are the sterner sex.
You made your point clearly set from the start and you analyzed it correctly according to the Cyprus society standards which is a point that we can all identify with.
Finally I would like to say that you did a great job, it was a very interesting essay that kept my interest all througout the end. The choice of vocabulary that you used shows to the reader that you were organized and that you researched your subject well enough before you wrote your essay.
Dear Niko,
ReplyDeleteI liked your response essay" The Sterner sex". Mostly,I liked the way you have structured your essay, putting good ideas and thoughts for women oppositions. You had a nice introductory paragraph as you state clearly what is your topic about and what is your opinion.I liked the way you started your essay, that "throughout history women are struggling to get eqqual rights with men."In most societies is happened all the time.In the main body, you have gave good enough arguments for woman's position. You explained clearly what is the role of a woman, in what other issues should be taken part.For instance, you wrote that " women who decide to stay at home and raise their children should be supported much more financially by the government" or " how are women expected to get the majority of votes in the parliament regarding the formation of a new drastic law that favours them, if they outnumbered."Also, I liked the contrast that you wrote between the women of the past and the women of today's.
However in my opinion, it would be better if you did not include the paragraph of women in church. Instead, you should write a paragraph about men opinion, in order to show us what they believe for this unequal treatment,that they undertand the woman's struggle.Finally, you ended your conclusion with good questions" Who should be considered as the sterner sex? or " Men that had all the privileges in their possession from the beginning, or women who fought to learn every single one of them?". It was a great essay with very interesting ideas.
Dear Nico,
ReplyDeleteYour response essay "The Sterner Sex" was an interesting topic to be discussed. Mostly, I liked the way you organised your essay and the way you used your thoughts. Your introduction was so fluid and gave me the chance to know what I will read next. Also I liked that you showed your opinion by formalising your writing in each paragraph The structured of your essay was in an easy way to follow.
Altough, I found interesting the questions you have write to emphasize your argument. I specially liked a specific question in the last paragraph which said, "So, who would considered as the Sterner Sex"? Moreover, I agree with Vasia that you should avoid to mentioned about the women in church and to point men's opinion also in this treatment.
Finally, your writing skill was very goodand your vocabulary was rich.This is good because makes your essay easy to understand and not be bored to read it. BUT in some cases you repeat the word "regarding", so it would be better to avoid repetition.
Finally, your response essay was a great thinking essay and you have showed enough. Keep trying for the best...Thanks.
Dear Nico,
ReplyDeleteI would like to start, by saying that you have done a great job with this essay and it seems that you spend time on it. Your essay,I believe, that is well structured and you expressed what you thought clearly with good vocabulary. I also noticed that your introduction especially,is very interesting while you talked about women in the past. I will agree with the points that you mentioned but I didn't like the fact that you closed your essay with questions.In my opinion, I believe, that it would be better if you asked the questions in the introduction because personaly I find it more interesting so you can answer the questions later on. I will also agree with the others which said that the things you've mentioned in your essay were fair and you didn't talk like most men.In conclusion your essay also shows that you revised it because you don't have grammar and spelling mistakes. Well done.
Nico,
ReplyDeleteI like the way you start your essay, in the introduction you make some very good points about the equality between men and women. I especially liked this phrase that you wrote: “The general mentality of men is that women should not have the same privileges as them, and even some women of older generations seem to have the same belief.” And I totally agree with it. Then as I continue to read it I liked the fact that you put statistics in your essay, this fact makes your essay more valuable and makes it more serious. Then I liked the way you divided your main body in paragraphs talking about different topics. Another thing that I liked about your essay was the comparisons that you make with the now day woman and the woman in the past and I also found the paragraph about the church very interesting. However, I thing that in the paragraph that you speak about divorce you should have done it with less details. You end your essay with a very good way by asking questions, this fact makes the readers to think about the things that you said in your essay.
Thank you all for your comments on my essay. I will take into consideration all the advice that you gave me. Since most of you referred to the paragraph about Church, I am thinking of changing it in the revised essay by adding points that are in support of women wanting to become priests, so that I will have stronger justifications for my position and make it more interesting.
ReplyDeleteDear Nico,
ReplyDeleteTo begin with, I like the way you started your introduction paragraph. You succeed to provide to the readers what you going to talk about. Over more, in the main body it’s seems that you arrange your ideas in comprehensibly and in organized way. You elaborate the topic very well through strong arguments. I like that you make a comparison between woman’s positions in the past and today that makes your essay more interesting. It will be better if you have added also a paragraph which refers how men react and realized about unequal rights of women. In addition, you should use more linking words in your essay while you move to one argument to the other. The way that you expressed your ideas by using a rich vocabulary you succeed to guide your readers literally. In conclusion, was good because you revise once again that women should be treated more fairly and equal way as men. However, was very well structure which draw my attention to read it. Well done.
Dear Nico, your response essay was very good.The use of language was quite advanced. The issues that you raised were very interesting.Actually,I found it hard to mark any errors, only one-two grammar mistakes.
ReplyDeleteIt is very true,that society indroduces certain norms and stereotypes about each gender. Going back in those days were women struggle for their rights is a bit scary to deal with - but that was the one end. Today's society indroduces the"New Woman",who appears much stronger,fearless,being educated,more or less taking even a higher level position in society now.Unfortunatly,that is the other end. Although,I am a woman and despite the fact in which I find it only fair to have equal rights with men- in my opinion we can not have the same rights,we can not be the same,as we differ in physical structure,way of thinking,way of dealing things in general and way of behaving.Hence,the most important of all- men by nature,can not give birth to a child and can not really experience motherhood from day one.
Sterner sex essay is about the rights of women that you had some comment on that. The right of women is a sensitive subject to talk about. So we should be careful about it.
ReplyDeleteFirst, I agree with you that before people thought that women do not have mind and they should be undertaken of men and unfortunately it had been accepted by women. I think that it has risen by this ancient belief that Eva cheats Adam and cause them fell down to the Earth. But according to Koran devil cheat both of them. In my religion men and women are equal but not similar. They both have been created with mould. Both have mind and sense but they have specific duty not privilege for each other.
Second, it is good to add some explanation about woman’s income. They usually earn money less than men .so they don’t have to spend money for family because they are not the one who is responsible for family. Therefore she is free to either save the money or spend it for family. But the man must spend the money for family because of his responsibility. I believe that although their income is not equal but it is fair.
Furthermore, I agree that government should protect single mothers to raise their children so in this case I agree with you.
In addition, women should be allowed to take any position they are professional in. Of course In this case, there are some jobs that are only suitable for men like working mine. But I think if depending on their characteristics and personality they like to work even as a miner, nobody can prevent them. We know some women that they go to war zones to report in spite of their danger.
Finally you mentioned the problems of woman’s life. I agree that divorce is a right for women. They should live with one who loves and respects them.
In conclusion, you have mentioned some important problems in this essay. I believe that if women know their rights they will not face problems. Women right is a nice motto. So they have to try to recognize their real rights which help them to promote their situation as human.
What do you mean that we should be careful about commenting on the rights of women?
ReplyDeleteEveryone can expreess his point of view on the subject,despite if we disagree or not.I am woman and yet I do not like the power that women have now.
Most men now feel inferior by the model of the "New Woman" as we manage to take over everything and leave them without a single responsibility.It's like we don't need them anymore.. That is not right.In my opinion, men are now the "Sterner Sex".
Dear classmates, from your comments on the essay I realized that some of you have a different opinion for some things that I write about, and others would prefer from me to write down the opinion of men on each issue that I raised. I do accept different opinions. In fact, people have different opinions even on the simpler matters. I deliberately did not mention in my essay about opposing opinions. By writing about opposing opinions on each topic, it would have as a result to change the style that I wished to achieve for my essay. It would no longer have the style of writing down my opinion and supporting it until the end of the essay. Its style would turn into a somehow informative one where I would be as an observer referring to what each side supports and at the end pick the side that I mostly agree with. Writing about both sides in an essay is something that I generally do, but that won’t help me achieve what I intend to achieve in this essay. I will of course think about adding a paragraph in order to show what men think about the issues that I raised. There are men that are in support of what I have written and men that have opposing opinions. I will try to do that and if the outcome is good I will add it to the essay.
ReplyDeleteBy the way the second comment was about farahnaz writings .. I was commenting what she wrote. Her first three lines..
ReplyDeleteMelina, I know that it was about Farahnaz. Farahnaz wrote "The right of women is a sensitive subject to talk about. So we should be careful about it". I am not sure if she felt insulted from something that I wrote about which made her express that way, or if those sentences she wrote came out to be interpreted in a way she didn't meant.I would also like from Farahnaz to reply in order to resolve this misunderstanding. I wrote the previous comments as a general response to what most of you commented on.
ReplyDeleteI think that Nicos provided his readers with a very strong introduction. He underlined the fact that most societies are so rigid and narrow-minded that they don't give women the opportunity to prove themselves (i.e. their intelligence or capabilities) to the opposite and purportedly superior sex. He clarified that men find it difficult to break away from the stereotypical view of women that previous generations have purposely passed on to them, or that they themselves have habitually formulated on account of the fact that they deem females as being of a lower status than they and this in fact is the prime reason for which women are deprived of their rights. I also feel as though he ended the first paragraph in the most appropriate of ways, since he got straight to the point, and tied his argument with a real life situation, which in this case is that the women in our own nation after so many centuries of being repressed, still are not granted equal rights as men even though this is what the law states. In the next paragraph, Nicos made reference to certain statistics, so as to show us that no matter how intelligent, experienced or professional women are at their job when being employed by the public or private sector in Cyprus, they can never hope for equal pay or career opportunities. He extended his line of argument to the church of Cyprus, which is depicted in a chauvinistic way. In hi opinion, it ought to be the government’s priority to provide child support for its female subjects. It seems as though Nicos admires the way in women over the ages have been committed to their cause of fighting for equality with the supposedly ‘dominant’ male sex ; and therefore considers it entirely contradictory that men (who were granted all kinds of rights automatically) were classed as being the ‘sterner sex’ due to the mentality of narrow-mindedness, located at all segments of society, universally. The only slight problem I noticed in Nicos’ essay, was the way he divided his essay into several paragraphs, which in turn made its meaning seem less significant.
ReplyDeleteHi Melina & Nikos;
ReplyDeleteUnfortunately,I couldn’t check the blog and your comments till now because I was busy with midterms.
I have mentioned that ‘taking about right of women is sensitive’ .I meant that when we take about this subject it causes argument because there are many different perceptions about it. Also about the part which I said we have to be careful I meant that all aspects that are related to women should be considered before giving comments. That sentence was just a note for my essay to ensure that what I was going to say may have positive or negative comment because it has written based on my culture and believes. It was only an introduction for entering to essay not a comment to Nikos’s assay. I think it was too short to explain my opinion clearly.
I started my comments to the assay from the body.
I hope that I could resolve this misunderstanding by these explanations.
Thank you for your comments.
Farahnaz, out of what you said I realized that I interpreted your words in a way that you didn’t meant. Thanks for replying. It helped to resolve this misunderstanding.
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