Who did never eat at least one packet of crisps? Obviously noone, because the way they are cooked seems to be tasty. Reyner Banham on "The Crisps at the Crossroads", analysed the sensibility that usefulness of crisps have in our lifes, but mostly in older centuries.
As I mentioned above, crisps were started to be created in 19th and 20th century. Industries were trying to investigate those tasty flavors as the meal in our everyday life. Of course, this investigation was under some appropriate rules, which governed according to crisps's production. Industrial people used a released way to encourage people to eat those unhealthy potatoes.
Although, crisps begun to be inside of our our drawer in the kitchen since they are created. This propably is the worst thing because those potatoes are cooked so delicious, but instead of their good taste they are formed into oil. Especially young children who finishes from scholl in the afternoon or watching tv and have their oily potatoes in front of them because they don't have anything to do. Also another example is when adults watching a football match or going to night clubs have the chance to eat them.
Flavors-crisps have the ability to taste nice, but also to smell nice. Some names of crisps are barbecue-bacon with sauce, cheese-onion, sault, Doritos and many other names. The big fact here is taht there is a huge number of crisps's names all over the world. In Cyprus there are industries who are cooking crisps such as LAYS.
Another point to add, is that each packet of crisps have colories, the weight and date. There is a small possibility those colories the wrote to be true but we don't have to trust them because the aim for industries is to sell their product. Moreover, we have to be aware of the day crisps were published and the day we will buy it. Maybe in each packet to write the date which is appropriate to eat it, but they are closed in this oily packet for so many days, so who knows what we are eating.
Finally, all consumers must be so careful of what they are eating, because those flavors are delecious, but with lot of oil and preservations inside them, which means bad health. These products are tend to be serious problem for the overweight people and this is dangerous for them. Don't waste your time at home but go to the supermarket and buy some fruits and fish, but if you want to buy the oily potatoes then think about it 3,4,5 times before.
Xenia, first of all I would like to say that I liked a lot your way of starting your essay by using question. You made it very clear to us what you are going to talk about in your essay, as you mention the title of the essay and the writer we have read in class. Also, I liked that you have used linking words to start each of your paragraphs to enrich your essay. This is a very good point on writing an essay because it seems that you want to create a motion in your essay by giving points to us and analyze them. In my opinion you could write more details for each of your paragraphs. Although it was good that you explain to us firstly why crisps are bad for our healthy and how they are cooked, then you talk about the flavors, the industry and why they are bad for us as before and your conclusion who you correctly advise us of what the crisps are causes to us. Moreover, you didn’t have many vocabulary mistakes except of few as in 3rd paragraph which you wrote ‘those calories the wrote’ as it make no sense. I liked a lot your phrase in your 3rd paragraph that you wrote’ they are closed in this oily packet for so many days, so who knows what we are eating’ because is what exactly people must think before they buy a packet of this and this directly passes the message to the reader of thinking twice before eating them. All in all, your essay had everything what an essay should have. Well done.
ReplyDeleteXenia, your essay is very clearly pointed out that chips are very unhealthy products and that we shouldn't include then in our diet. Even though you start your response essay by saying that Reyner Banham analyses the ‘’ sensibility and usefulness of chips’’, you come to bring the opposite side which is very attractive. I also agree with you that chips are all over in our lives even in home, in our entertainment, outside the home or when ever we go that’s why this invention is successful.
ReplyDeleteYour last paragraph is also very interesting because you are giving us options of adding some more healthy products such as fish or fruits instead of chips. However, despite the fact that you address good points in your essay about chips I think that it would be better if you had mentioned your contradicting ideas with the writer from the early beginning in order to have a fully picture about your own believes.
Finally it would also be very interested to add opinions of what other people said about the positive and negative influence of eating chips and also how chips are promoted in television and in magazines.
Xenia, firstly I would like to say that I found your essay interesting and I enjoyed reading it. I liked the structure of you essay, because you start with saying when crisps started to be created and this is some basic information that we need to know about your topic. The way you start your essay is very good, the fact that you start with a question and then give some other basic information about your topic that makes a very good introduction. I also liked the way you split your paragraphs and in each one you say a different thing about crisps, like that they are bad for us and not healthy to eat. In my opinion you gave the right amount of information and arguments in each of your paragraphs. I like the sentence which you begin your first paragraph “Although, crisps begun to be inside of our drawer in the kitchen since they are created.” I think it’s a good starting sentence for a paragraph and you analyzed it well. In your essay I found a few mistakes that perhaps you didn’t saw when you were revising your essay. Finally I liked how you close your essay and your conclusion. It’s a very good idea that you give advice to the readers to buy fruit and fish which are healthy instead of oily potatoes.
ReplyDeleteXenia, I thought that you provided your reader with a great argument from the very first line, primarily due to the fact that the question you posed, sums up the notion the whole essay and makes it easier for us to imagine what you're going to discuss in the upcoming paragraphs. Xenia instantly mentions the simple truth which characterises people's relationship with this form of fast-food (i.e. crisps) - which is that nearly no one can resist the temptation of such savoury (or even sweet in some cases) delight. I would have preferred it though, if Xenia had directly referred to the evidence of crisps' alleged efficiency from Reyner Banham's actual text. That way the reader could have compared the ideas you set forth with the analytical aspects in favour of various types of crisps, as mentioned in the short story. I found it very interesting when Xenia described crisps' link with history, since it highlights the fact that people made a habit of resorting to unhealthier food options (nowadays known as 'junk food'), even before having the everyday comfort of convenience stores, that we seem to take for granted in the contemporary Western world. Furthermore, Xenia uses her shrewd judgement to prove to her reader audience that industrialists were intent on manipulating innocent people into eating these 'unhealthy' crisps as a means of getting them hooked to this new form of snack and profiting monetarily. Xenia wasted no time when it came to discussing the dangers which crisps are widely known to cause to our health. She makes it obvious that no age group is immune to the negative effects of indulging in this ready-made food. She draws our attention to the fact that crisps are deep fried in oil and this makes it all the worse for those who are in search for something with instant energy, but are too lazy to shop for the right ingredients or cook more nutritional dish. She observes that children who arrive hungry after school and obese members of society too, are traditionally the most vulnerable categories of people nowadays, but also warns that 'mature' adults in Cyprus but also abroad, might get carried away to scoff down their favourite tasty snack whilst spending time with friends (i.e. during a football game). Xenia gives us well-informed advice about what it means to choose a packet of innocent-looking chips from the supermarket shelves. This in turn makes us aware that we should not be fooled by the sell-by date written for the public and that we must check the calorie content, unless we're prepared to risk our fragile health or overall weight of course. Finally, Xenia acts like a strict teacher who wants to put the fear of God in her pupils. Naturally, her readers (irrelevant of sex, nationality or age) are the ones who she is addressing and in this case it is absolutely imperative that we trust her good guidance & personal opinion ; and dash to the supermarket to buy the right food (i.e. fruit and fish), so as to make a point of avoiding the sinfully 'delicious' crisps. The sooner we face the miserable reality of binging on fat-inducing
ReplyDeletefast-food (namely crisps), the better.
Xenia, firstly, I would like to mention, that I really liked the way you started your introduction by the use of a question, you made an interesting introduction which is very important to gain your readers attention. Also you explained clearly what you will write about.
ReplyDeleteA thing that makes your essay better, is that you used a lot of linking words. Moreover, your essay has a good structure, as you explained first your subject, in the main body you talked about the bad things these oily potatoes can do to our bodys and you finished by giving some advices to your readers which is actually very good.
Last, some things you could do to make your essay even better are, to increase your vocabulary, as you used the same word twice in one sentence and avoid spelling mistakes.
Xenia's respone essay is nice and clear.
ReplyDeleteShe elaborates and explains why chips are so tasty and yet so unhealthy.
She gives to her readers a historical background on the issue she argues.She stated cleary her position towards her readers and she also gave them some advice.
I think it's worth to mention that the topic in which Xenia wrote her response essay was difficult to expand,because it talks about a particular junk food and nothing more.
To conclude, it was a nice and well planned eassay,regardless if the subject was not very interesting and motivating for further elaboration.
Xenia, I liked very much that you started your introduction with a question,by that you forced us to read it and enjoy it.
ReplyDeleteYou explained very well why crips are so tasty and at the mid-time so unhealthy.
While I was reading your response I convinced that I have to stop going to the convenience stores and buy crips.
All in all, it was well planned essay and by revising it again it will be better,because you will correct some syntax mistakes that all non native speakers do. I really enjoy it and thank you because you are the reason that I will try to stop eating this "fast food" as you characterized it.
Well done Xenia.
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ReplyDeleteHi all, I really appriciated the fact that you gave me your advices (at least some of you) and believe me I have to revice my essay because I saw some mistakes which were unecceptable to be there. Although, I would like to discuss with Tamara because in her opinion I didn't get something which she noticed or some mistakes or something anyway. I mean she wrote so many things for my topic, but she didn't refer to her general view of MY WRITING PROCESS. So,I probably don't have the chance to know what to avoid or what to keep in mind!!! ANYWAYS
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Dear Xenia,
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, I like that you set up a question so that you directly mention your topic you going to elaborate. Wherefore, I like that in your introduction paragraph you also made a contrast among with the author’s view before ages ago. Besides, you raise historical information when crisps were started that you give to the readers’ deeper knowledge about crisps. Furthermore, in your main body you straight out your points that crisps are place in our daily life strongly which are unhealthy for our nutrition. In conclusion, I like that you express your feelings against crisps due to that fact that are cause problems in our health. As well, I like that you give advice to the readers in order that to prevent their selves to become obese or object of “junk food”. I would like to give you advice to revise your essay once again so that you omit spellings mistakes. However, it was good structure and well developed. Good job Xenia.
Hi xenia;
ReplyDeleteWhile Human society is improving and the population are increasing, they involve with some problems. Also, during these increasing, their needs and their duties are changing. So they have to change their life to adopt themselves to these changes. One of these changes is eating habit. It has changes from home made to factory made foods. Crisps are one of them you have written about .You mentioned that it has been changed its method of making and its flavours during time but What we use today, has many tastes and it is harmful .
The introduction begins with your opinion about crisps that were made with too many tasty and unhealthy ingredients. Following, you mentioned that because it forms into oil, it makes it become full of calories. In addition, you warned about the date of expiry they write on the packages which is a threat for health due to the long time that it is the pocket with too much oil.
More over you discussed abut flavour bout I don’t know what the relation between your opinion and Varity of tastes is .I think that you meant variety of flavours causes to attract people to buy more which is a bad behaviour.
In conclusion, you gave well advises and informations.
Xenia I liked your essay very much. I think you have structured it very well because in each paragraph you analyzed a different aspect of crisps, for example in the second paragraph you analyzed the times that someone usually have crisps(kids after school etc) and the third paragraph is based on the different flavors of crisps. This is very helpful to the reader in order not to be confused and generally it helped me keep concentrate on the subject crisps. Furthermore I liked the fact that you wrote some background informations about crisps for example when they were created and what their aim was. This shows that you've searched it and that you have provided more “advanced” informations rather than only the basics and this attracts the reader. Also I have to say that the fact that you have put suggestions and warnings in your essay, made your essay a lot more interesting to read. For example “Don't waste your time at home but go to the supermarket and buy some fruits and fish” and also you've warned the readers by advising them to be careful with the expiry date and also about the too much oil and preservations. All in all Xenia I liked your essay and the only thing that in my opinion needs to be improved, when you are going to revise your essay, are some spelling mistakes that you had. Xenia this was a very good essay.
ReplyDeleteXenia, your essay is nicely structured. You distinguish each issue to a separate paragraph. I liked your first sentence in the introductory paragraph because you made me consider the extent in which crisps are consumed globally. I also liked that in the second paragraph you show that there is no specific age group that crisps are consumed. However, I was confused by your first sentence in the second paragraph. You used the word “although” which made me expect a continuation of that sentence. I think you should put a comma after the word “created” and link it with the next sentence that starts with “This probably…” by making some modifications to it. I also noticed some grammatical and vocabulary mistakes in your essay. They are not much, but correcting them will improve the image of your essay. All the issues that you mention are very interesting and relevant but I think that you should try to elaborate a bit more on each of them. I consider it difficult to write an essay about crisps and in fact I was surprised that there was even an essay in our book about crisps. Xenia, what I liked the most about your essay is your thought about the information on the crisps’ packages about calories. I never thought until I read your essay, that even these information on the packages can be misleading. In your conclusion, you address to your readers directly, like you did in the first sentence of the introductory paragraph. You try to give a message to your readers by telling them not to be tempted by the wonderful taste of crisps, and urge them to consume something healthy instead.
ReplyDeleteXenia,I found your essay very interesting. It is well structured and very clearly. First of all, I liked the way you have started your essay with a question and what you have mentioned about the author of the essay.You exlpained clearly that crisps are not so healthy in our life. For instance, you said that are not so healthy because they cooked with oil. Then, you continued saying about the calories they conatined and what consequences we have when we have a taste. Especially, you mentioned young children who returned from school or while they are watching football match they ate chips. I also like what you have mentioned about the industry of Lays which is the most famous in Cyprus.You gave good ideas in your essay, in my opinion you should make a research on crisps and write some things about them in your introduction.In your conclusion,I liked that you have finished your essay with giving an advice, that people should think more about chips and buy some fruits and fish which are healthy for them. All in all, It was a nice essay.
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