Friday, December 4, 2009

Response essay "Gretchen the squid:"

Is there any person on earth who doesn't have goals? or is there anybody which wouldn't try everything to make his dreams come true? Of course everybody would try but not all of them will succeed and each one of them for different reasons. Dave Eggers, in his short-short story " Gretchen the squid" introduces us to an enormous squid who lives in the Caspian sea and has the dream to become an accountant and be accepted to the University of Illinois (one of the best in accounting). Her parents, were always supporting to her but they do not agree with her decision because even if Gretchen could get in the university, for sure she will face discrimination since she is very different from others.

The writer with this story, aims with an interesting way to make us understand, that in fact what he does, is writing a letter of appeal. He uses a humoristic way by mentioning the squid but in reality he does not descibe the squid but every person which is ambitious and has it's goals high but it is very difficult to achieve them. In the whole story Eggers, make use of the 3rd person and uses a serious tone in most of the story. Despite the fact that the context is ridiculous, the tone he uses is serious rather than sympathetic and he is trying to pass the message of the story through feelings and while we read the story we put ourselves in Gretchen's position and we can understand how it is to feel like that. Moreover, most of us see this in every day life.

Furthermore, Dave Eggers is raising the issue of discrimination. He wants to make us realize that he is using the squid which is enormous and different while this happens to people too. If a person is very fat for example or has a health problem, most of us wouldn't see this person in a good way and this is wrong. This happens also with people with different nationalities. If someone is from China for example and goes to another country the people there will see him very differently. Gretchen's character in the story shows us that she is ambitious, not only wants to go to university but in one of the best universities, she is afraid of letting herself down and also shows us that she is embarrassed because she is different. Many people think the same way as her and as we see in every day life most of us we are afraid of disappointing ourselves, either in college, work or even in our social life, so here we come back to the point that the writer by using a squid is actually talking about people. He also refers to the unfair situation of being very good at something ( e.g. Gretchen with numbers) but cannot succeed because someone is different.

Gretchen as it is mentioned in the story, lives in the Caspian sea and wants very much to go in America. America which is a superpower, attracts many people especially for jobs because America offers many opportunities for employment and this is one of the reasons that many people go there. Gretchen what wanted most was to wear a suit, glasses and have an office such as everybody else. In the story Dave Eggers, also refers to T.G.I Fridays which is one of the most famous restaurant in America and the kind of people which goes there is mostly young businessman.

In conclusion, Dave Egger's short story passes several messages to its readers. Talking about discrimination which is also a contemporary phenomenon and in one point of view it shows how unfair our society can be sometimes. However my opinion is that each person which wants something very much must try hard to make it through and believe in himself no matter what other people are saying.

9 comments:

  1. Alexia, your response essay is very well formed and I like the fact that you have started your essay with questions, this allow us to be in a position of asking ourselves. It is true that the writer uses a fish for addressing some real points in is story. The context is not ridiculous but also is impossible not only because a fish wants to study but because as we know fishes do not have memory, but by using this serious tone it make us to believe that this story has something serious to show us. My favorite phrase from your response essay is that ‘’ each person which wants something very much try hard to make it through and believe himself’’.
    On the other hand I believe that in your revised essay it would be very interested to add some events that happened around the world which has to do with the discrimination of people and especially for people who want to study. An example is what happened in Cyprus a few years ago when students had a fight because the head girl of the school was not Cypriot. This does not happens in Cyprus only but everywhere.

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  2. Alexia, your essay is nicely structured, and the way you start your essay introduces your reader directly to the main point which is for a person setting his/her goals and trying to achieve them. In the third paragraph you refer to another major issue which is discrimination against other people. I believe that everyone who read the story, felt or had been in a similar position with Gretchen for at least once in their lives. So, I agree with you when you say that: “Many people think the same way as her and as we see in every day life most of us we are afraid of disappointing ourselves…” In the fourth paragraph, I believe that you should make a connection of the sentence: “In the story Dave Eggers…” more directly with Gretchen. It seems to me that it has no clear relation with Gretchen. In your conclusion, the second sentence starts with “Talking about discrimination …” It would be better if you used “It is talking about discrimination…” so that I could make a clearer relation of the word “talking” with Dave Egger's short story. Finally, I would like to say that my favourite part of your essay is your last sentence where you say that: “each person which wants something very much must try hard to make it through and believe in himself no matter what other people are saying.”

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  3. Alexia, firstly I liked how you got started your essay in a way that make all of us concern about our goals. It’s correct that you put the name’s writer in your essay and described to us what the story is about. Also, I liked that you analyze the aim of the writer and his way of writing and make it very clear to us to understand it. In my opinion you could avoid making big sentences or just put the (;) to split them for example in the second paragraph. It’s good that you put linking words in starting each of your paragraphs, and I also find your way of explaining the essay by giving examples of us in our daily life as you said about colleges in your 3rd paragraph. You have also some grammatical words on your writing and this could help you correct them by revising. All in all, I liked that in your conclusion you have mentioned again your points. I liked your last sentence “each person which wants something very much must try hard to make it through and believe in himself”, because is a way that you pass a message to your readers that if you want something you must fight for it.

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  4. Alexia, you have started your essay with questions which is a very interested way to introduce your topic.You clearly got to the point which is the mnain concern for all of us,to manage our goals.You have taken the great example of Gretchen's story,a fish that tried to achieve her goals.This sounds funny to us, but it is not. It may be a squid, but in reality it can be possesed to each person's life.She may be different from others, instead she wanted to achieve her own goals. For instance you said, "Gretchen's character in the story shows us that she is ambitious, not only wants to go to university but in one of the best universities, she is afraid of letting herself down and also shows us that she is embarrassed because she is different." From that phrase we can see the discrimination that she felt in order to achieve her goals. Specifically, we are familiar with such a situation such as Gretchen,in that case we should respect that person's gaols even if is different from us.However,it would be better if you gave more examples not only to support Gretchen's discrimination but also to mention other cases that probably met in our country.Also,you had some grammatical words in your essay that it will be helpful to check them in your revision.In your conclusion, you said that "each person which wants something very much must try hard to make it through and believe in himself no matter what other people are saying"that all should follow in order to have better results.All in all,it was a nice esay.

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  5. Alexia, I liked your easay but I think that you wouldn't write too much to the introduction about the dream of the squid. For example the opinion of her parents you can mention it at the main body of your response.It was very smart from you to start by questioning because you force the readers,to keep reading your response.
    Of course you have some syntax mistakes but by revising your essay you can correct them and be better. Don't be sad by that because I have the same problem and also all non-native speakers but,we can improve it by read more,as Mackay said.
    In your revising text it will be more interesting if you write more about "descrimination". As descrimination of the world is very contemporary,relevant you can find many sources and even from newspapaers.
    Really, it was pleasure for me to read your essay. I'm waitting more to your revise text!
    Well done Alexia!

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  6. I'm sorry, I want to delete the previous one because I have some mistakes but I'can't.
    So,essay no easay
    discrimination no descrimination
    newspapers no newspapaers
    waiting no waitting
    Sorry Alexia mou, a comment should be correct but typing some times force you to make mistakes.

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  7. Alexia your essay is very interesting and has a good structure.You have managed to explain and elaborate the juice of this fiction story.The way that you use the language is quite good and there are always ways of improvment.You did mention the various issues that Eggers raises in his letter of appeal.My advise to you is, that you should not be afraid to elaborate even more what the text brings out to you.
    Nevertheless,it was a good response essay.

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  8. Alexia, I think the way you start your essay is very interesting. The questions that you make at the beginning of your essay would make the reader think about the answers and to wonder what is going to be the topic of your essay. In the introduction you could write less about the summary of the story. Some of the points that you make in the introduction you could replace them somewhere in the main body. Also you could explain a little more about the letter of appeal. I like the paragraph which you speak about the discrimination; you give some interesting examples there. You explain very well what the story is about. Your vocabulary is very good and you didn’t make any spelling mistakes. Well done

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  9. Dear Alexia,
    To begin with, I like that in the beginnings of you are essay you set up a question because it’s draw the attention of readers and force them to wonder their selves. You succeed to provide us what are you going to talk about. Over more, in the main body it seems satisfied because you managed to explain and elaborate the story. I like the fact that, you gave examples of the discrimination in order to make it comprehensible that also happens today. What is more, I like you are conclusion because you emphasize that if someone have dreams or goals should be make it true and not take into account what the rest people said. Nevertheless, it was a good essay.

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