Every person in this world is born to do something with their lives, to have goals and dreams and try hard in order to be able to achieve them. Could you ever imagine how life would be without goals, if everybody lives their lives without a purpose? In the short-short story of Dave Eggers, “Gretchen the Squid”, dreams and goals are the main topic. Gretchen who is an enormous squid wants more than anything in the world to be an accountant. She lives in the Caspian Sea with her family. Even though her parents are being supportive so far for all of her dreams, she knows that they will never approve this one, her dream of being an accountant.
With this short-short story, Egger’s efforts for presenting a letter of appeal are obvious. He chooses to use an enormous squid in the place of a person; a squid with goals, dreams, and hopes. In real life this can easily be taken as a surreal joke, for the obvious reason of course that an enormous squid can never be taken as an accountant. He uses third person in the whole story and also the tone of voice is serious and sympathetic (deadpan humor). The writer uses a very smart way to capture the reader’s attention by using the serious tone of voice, and the not too serious context. There is a contrast between the tone of voice and the context because the tone as I said is serious but the context is ridiculous and funny. The implied reader of the story is a well educated accountant who most probably wears a “smartly tailored suit, black pumps and glasses, prepares annual returns for a Fortune 500 company, finds tax loopholes in unexplored places,” and of course the drinks afterwards at a downtown TGI Friday's.
The fact that in his short-short story, Egger describes an enormous squid, that also has a name, Gretchen, makes the story more personal. He concentrates on her one and only dream, to be an accountant and study at the best university for accountants, the University of Illinois. Gretchen is an ambitious, very confident squid, but most importantly she is a dreamer. She’s also afraid of letting herself down and she wants to change her image, to make it fit similar to that of a perfect accountant. What is more important to this short-story is the fact that the writer uses an enormous squid in the place of what could have been an overweight, ugly woman who is going after her dream and goals. In this way the writer shows the unfairness, the racism, and the stereotyping of people, that exists is in the world. Gretchen is embarrassed of her appearance and sad because she cannot do what she most wants in the world; some people feel like this every day. They are afraid of the misunderstanding that their appearance would cause and the discrimination they are going to deal with. Gretchen wants to do what she is best at, but she cannot do it; this is very unfair for her.
Furthermore, Gretchen wants to go to the United States and live the American dream. Many people from Eastern Europe and Asia go to the United States, full with ambitions, dreams and goals to achieve a better and a happier life. They seek for an opportunity to live the American dream which they consider it to be the ideal way of living. It is worth mentioning that Gretchen, a squid of the salt water lives in the Caspian Sea, a sweet water lake. Similar to those people who are captured by their own system, cultures or religions. Also the writer mentions T.G.I Fridays which is a chain restaurant, very typical in America for young business people. The reason that it mentions this is to shows us that Gretchen wants to be like them, to go there after work and have a drink with her colleagues.
In conclusion in this short-short story the issues of discrimination, racism and stereotyping are being raised. Gretchen the enormous squid who dreams of becoming an accountant and work in a big firm, and study in the University of Illinois, is being held back by her appearance, her location and her parents not approval. The unfair judgment that some people go through their lives, because of their names and ids, is a way of isolating people among us. Everybody should chase their dreams, goals and ambitions, and try their best to achieve them. All people no matter, color, race, religion, or political believes, should have equal opportunities, equal chances, to be who they want to be in their lives. They should not be limited nor by the Caspian Sea, nor by their size, nor by their environment; they should be accepted and valued for what they are.
Marilyn, I liked the way you formed your essay.From the beginning, you get to the point of your essay.Every one has dreams and goals that try hard to achieve them. Then, you have mentioned Gretchen's story who is an enormous squid with great ambitions and goals to achieve.Even if it is a squid, the writer wants to show us that Gretchen's story could be in everyone's life.For instance, you said that "Gretchen is an ambitious, very confident squid, but most importantly she is a dreamer." So, we should respect her own dream to be an accountant because all have dreams and want to came true. Then, you talk about discrimination. You describe well the problem that Gretchen faced because of her appearance even though she had her own dreams.It shows what you have mentioned, "the unfairness, the racism, and the stereotyping of people, that exists is in the world."
ReplyDeleteIn my opinion, you should write more about Gretchen's discrimination. For having mentioned different examples of discrimination that we faced in our country and how do we show our respect for not feel discriminated.I liked the way you ended your conclusion, "all people no matter, color, race, religion, or political believes, should have equal opportunities, equal chances, to be who they want to be in their lives" which I think is an important message to live with.All in all, it is a nice essay with a good vocabulary.
Marilyn, your essay is nicely structured. You divide each topic to a separate paragraph making it easier for the reader to follow the way your essay develops. The way you start your essay drew my interest because you made me realize that I might see a part of myself in Gretchen’s story. I liked that in the second paragraph you talk about what the writer intents to achieve by writing that story, and also that you refer to the way the writer uses the language in order to achieve that. However, I don’t agree with you when you say that: “The implied reader of the story is a well educated accountant…” I believe that the writer intents his story to be read by a wide range of readers including the educated accountants. You develop each topic very successfully, but I would also like to see you emphasize even more on how determined Gretchen is to achieve her goals by referring to the part where Eggers says is his story that Gretchen is willing to destroy anyone who might stand in her way. Finally, my favourite part of your essay is in your concluding paragraph when you say that: “All people no matter, color, race, religion, or political believes, should have equal opportunities, equal chances, to be who they want to be in their lives.” Saying that, you nicely summarize in a single sentence the message that the writer intents to transmit to his readers.
ReplyDeleteMarilyn,your essay has a very good structure.
ReplyDeleteYou pointed out and explained the issues that the writer raised in his fiction story.
Although,you did mentioned everything something was missing.My advise,is to look for other issues as well, that could possibly fit into your argument and make it even stronger.Despite all that,your essay was very well planed and you made it easy for your readers to follow your sayings,all the way to the very end.
Marilyn, your essay is very clear and well expressed. My favourite sentence of your essay is "The unfair judgment that some people go through their lives, because of their names and ids, is a way of isolating people among us." I liked it because we see that in our daily life and in my opinion this is a shame.
ReplyDeleteMoreover, the structure of your essay is very good since you introduced a different subject in each paragraph. However, in your essay you have mentioned discrimination and stereotypes and it will be very interesting if you include some examples we see in our life. Also I agree with Nicos which says that the implied readers of the story are not only people which have a relation with accounting.In conclusion I believe that it was a very nice essay.
Marilyn I really liked your response essay. It was a well structured essay with a nice introduction, paragraphs to separate each point that you wanted to brought up and finally a good conclusion. First of all the thing that I like the most in your essay is in the third paragraph the sentence in which you say “the writer uses an enormous squid in the place of what could have been an overweight , ugly woman who is going after her dream and goals” . I believe that this was a clever way to show that the writer was referring as you said to “unfairness, the racism and the stereotyping of the world” because by associating the particular squid with a human being, in fact by giving her the shape and the character of a woman, you made it easier for the reader to understand how “ Gretchen” was feeling and be touched by the story. You made it more realistic. Also I liked how you ended up your essay by supporting equality and as you said “all people no matter color, race, religion or political believes should have equal opportunities, equal chances”. It was a nice message for the readers of your essay. The only thing that I have to suggest for your revised essay is that you may want to write shorter sentences in order to make your essay easier to understand and more cohesive. Also in some cases while I was reading the essay I felt that you were repeating some points. This might be a good thing as well because someone may interpret it as an emphasizing point but If you like bare this in mind while revising your essay. All in all Marilyn I liked your essay.
ReplyDeleteDear Marylin,
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, you are essay was well structured. I like a lot how you started you are introduction paragraph; because you achieve to gain reader’s attention. In the main body, you arrange each paragraph separate and you made comprehensibly for the readers to follow you are ideas. You are conclusion is very strong that make the readers to get the point of you are essay. You give advice and encourage the people to attempt for their dreams and goals. In my opinion, it would be better if you elaborate more about Gretchen’s discrimination and give examples of how society today faced it. In addition, I would like to recommend you to omit the long sentences in order you are readers do not exhausted. Despite all, you are essay was very nice and well developed.