Response to "Evening Parties" by Rose Macaulay
God created Adam and then Eva to show us that human beings cannot survive alone. Can anyone of us imagine his or her life without other people’s company? Even if we don’t want to admit it we cannot live alone. There thousands and thousands of ways meeting new people. Evening parties is one of them. Some people love being at a party, some others hate it being there, and others are there because they have to. For many of us, parties are ridiculous and for every one there is a unique reason. Moreover, good breeding demand to be at the party, even if you like It or not; is not necessary to stay there until the close of the evening especially when you have to go to 3 or 4 at the same evening.
Nevertheless, we finally be at an evening party which begins at about 8 o’clock and ends up about midnight, wearing our best clothes to impress the others especially when celebrities would be there. Showtime has begun for many people who were dying to be at the party counting the days, to show their new expensive clothes. And that’s when many women even men entering at the party showing off, walking and ignoring everyone else.
Also, a group of people standing near the table of foods among entire strangers, without talking to each other just eating and drinking. For them this is paradise, free food and drink even listening to the music they like. They see each other for curiosity, see drunk persons making fool of their self and this is when they feel glad and proud to be there making fun of them. They also might think we are very lucky to be there because there are worse from us.
We finally got to the party and find our self separated by a crowd of guests. People of different ages, color and gender see each other maybe for first time. ‘Hey let’s go, there will be many women’ men saying to each other when they got the invitation. Later, you see a group of men just standing there seeing each woman passes, waiting the right moment to talk to them. But, let’s be fair many women go there for picking men, and maybe for them this is the only reason that they had been there.
Lots of people go at the evening parties for respect of the host as good manners demands. You need to have patient of course if you hate parties, some talent for acting and some readiness of speech when you have been there. The secret is to be quite or better hide in a corner when the most of them are away and just relax by listening to music and hoping that the time would pass. Also many of us should remember that we have to expose our own inability by taking part in these entertainments. On the other hand if there isn’t any chance to go there you must do your best by refusing quietly as possible, avoiding being ridiculous of excuses. Furthermore, most of people who organize evening parties they have a specific reason. They may celebrate their son’s or daughter’s wedding, birth, birthday, even a better job and many of the guests who have been there trying to avoid each other because they are bored of such meetings.
Therefore, another reason for going to an evening party is to have some fun. Of course not all people like it but the truth is when you are with friends or be social, everything is cool. Public or private occasions if you are a fun of parties there is no doubt that you feel bored. You can see people that you may not see before, old friends, some relatives and this is a chance to get away even for a night from your daily life.
All in all our life is a way of having more and more experiences, meeting new people, making different things. We must feel grateful that we have the opportunity being invited in a party because there are other people that would have been killed to be in our place. We must be thankful of what we have in our lives, we must do what we want to do and not thinking others opinion and the most important of all we must be ourselves and not pretend to be a person we aren’t. After all everyone hates loneliness and if we want to be accepted in this society, we must do our best to show what we really are as a person.
Saturday, October 24, 2009
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Dear Elena,
ReplyDeleteI would like to tell you that I like the way you express your ideas in your essay 'Evening Parties.' It is a well structured essay that involves a lot of interested arguments.
First of all, I like the way you introduced your topic with the question 'can anyone of us imagine his or her life without othe's people company?.'It attracts my interesting in order to read more about the topic. Then, you clearly state the reasons why some people find parties ridiculous or to be socialized or to have some fun. I also like the phrase " Hey let's go,there would be women, men saynig to each other when they got the invitation. I think is clever phrase as is the only real reason why men may go to evening parties.
Moreover, your essay is very interesting because it has nice words and phrases, for instance the phrase " good breeding demand."
All in all, I have read a good enough and well sructured essay that got my attention.It includes all the arguments that at the end justified the topic.
Elena,
ReplyDeleteI liked very much the way you started your essay by saying about Adam and Eva to show that humans were created to keep each other company because no one can live an his own.
"God created Adam and then Eva to show us that human beings cannot survive alone. Can anyone of us imagine his or her life without other people’s company? Even if we don’t want to admit it we cannot live alone."The way you started the essay with the above introduction made me interested to keep reading it but the only thing that i didnt like is when later on in the essay you stretched it with lots of details that could be avoided.
Finally, it is a very well structured essay that clearly states the reasons that people go or dont go to the parties.
Elena, I liked your essay very much. I especially enjoyed your introduction, since it had prepared us of what we were going to read in the essay very clearly. Your thesis statement was clever and interesting and it definitely played a huge role to the fact that I liked your essay, because later on when I read the whole essay I found this sentence “God created Adam and then Eva to show us that human beings cannot survive alone” a very good argument to show that people need each others company and that is why they throw parties. Moreover I found your structure very good organized since you have separated the reasons of someone going to a party, in clear paragraphs and helped the reader not to get lost while reading the essay. I also liked the fact that you have put suggestions in you essay. For example when you wrote “the secret is to be quite or better hide in a corner when the most of them are away and just relax by listening the music and hoping that the time would pass” I think by this way you made your essay more personal to you and to the readers.
ReplyDeleteDear Elena,
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, I like how you start you introduction paragraph by say that God created our first ancestors as a couple rather than individual and solitary being. Therefore, is clear for the readers that you attend the parties to be socialized with the guests of the party. Afterwards, you curry on by mention about that some people like or dislike to go or some of them they ought to go to the parties. However, your last paragraph in my opinion it would be better if you omitted and you add in the main body. The reason is because you clarify your thesis statement at the begging so that is chatter. Over more, in the main body it seem satisfied because you describe how the party begun, the appetite of the guests, how is process the situation of the party and the reasons that people organize it. It was a good idea that you express your own opinion and give advice for the readers if they will attend a party how they will deal with it. In conclusion, in your last paragraph in the end, it will be better if you wrote that everyone don’t like to be alone rather than “everyone hates loneliness….” . Nevertheless, it was a well structure and comprehensible essay with good points out and interesting to attract someone’s attention.
Well done Elena
Elena, as the others mentioned above, I will agree by saying that your introduction was very good and nicely expressed I believe. In general, all the essay was quite good. You didn't put a lot of details and you wrote your points clearly.I also believe that you devided your paragraphs well, and it's an interesting essay which attracts attention.
ReplyDeleteMoreover,you put some very beautiful phrases such us "After all everyone hates loneliness and if we want to be accepted in this society, we must do our best to show what we really are as a person" or " God created Adam and then Eva to show us that human beings cannot survive alone". I also want to say, as I said many times at the past,that, I like the method with the questions that you used which are making the essay more interesting. At last, I would like to add that I think it's obvious that you revised your essay before posting it and that's why you don't have any spelling or grammar mistakes. Thanks.
Elena, I enjoyed reading your essay very much. In your essay I liked especially the introduction. You managed to draw the attention of the reader at the beginning of the essay and this is very important. You start the essay with a very unique way and this is the thing that kept me reading your essay with interest. From the introduction I also like the part when you asked a question, this makes the readers to think for the answer. You also express with really clear way your topic by saying that the evening parties are ways for meeting new people and socialize. In the main body you describe very well the different reasons that people go to parties although I think you could avoid some details to make the essay better and more close to the topic. In the essay I also like the linking words that you use. The structure and the vocabulary that you use in your essay are very good and also some phrases that you use like “everyone hates loneliness and if we want to be accepted in this society, we must do our best to show what we really are as a person”, “good breeding demand to be at the party”, “Showtime has begun for many people who were dying to be at the party counting the days, to show their new expensive clothes” .
ReplyDeleteThe text that Elena has written about party will be criticized of its structure in three points, introduction, main body and conclusion as it will be shown you.
ReplyDeleteFirst, the introduction is good. It is started with a good reason to be together and then three points ‘love’, ‘hate’ and ‘have to’ were made with some examples.
Moreover, in main body these points were developed in separate paragraphs and explained with more specific examples, but I think it would be better if the points were in an order; for example, participation in a party for loving it, were repeated after hate reasons.
Finally, in conclusion the concept of the story were mentioned, as we can see in this line “The most important of all we must be ourselves” and you have an idea, and that is to be together not for showing each other.
I think this essay has been written well and has been structured in the paragraphs, and it would be perfect if your points were in order.
Dear classmates, I have read all your comments about my essay and I wanted to thank you for your advises and your way of telling me things. Of course I will try to correct my essay next time, by putting my points into an order and try to avoid specific details and stay focus to the whole point.thank you!
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